UPDATE

I checked out the site and found both your song and Jackilyn's songs so here's what I think:

With your song, I liked the attempt to mix the rap with the smoother R&B vocals. I also thought that the beat was good, once it got rolling passed the intro. I did have an issue with the lyrics however. Nothing quite seemed like it flowed or fit at certain parts of the song. It felt like it changed from subtle to raunchy and back again. I didn't think that the "Emotional Rollercoaster" section fit very well either. Overall, I thought it was pretty good and could just use some tweaking.

I liked Jackilyn's songs a lot. The songs were high energy and kinda smooth. But I suppose I'm somewhat partial to playful beats. A few of her lyrics seems a little reminscent of Ciara's, but they were good. I think it said she's still in high school (or maybe that was just for the song) so the lyrics should beef up over time. But both songs were really good (I think I liked "Raised Better" a little more).

Congrats on the new job and good luck with the music.....

Thanks a lot. Yeh on my track that's pretty much the unedited version. I said the same thing to Tokyo about the EMOTIONAL ROLLER COASTER PART. I was like no that part if it's going to be sung then I'll sing it. But we never got around to doing it. Oh yeah and that's the rapper I'm just doing the singing.

Yeh as for JackilynI call her baby Ciara. But I think eveything she's doing right now is appropriate for her age. Thank's for the comment.